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Moon-lit
   Dream-ing
Aw-ake to-night

No-one
   Near-me
To-make it-right

Me-lan-
   Chol-ly
No-where to-run

Need-ing
  Tear-drops
But-none will-come

Watching her so close - but she's a million miles away.
But she doesn't know - that he really feels this way...
Watching her so close - but she's a million miles away.
But she doesn't know - and that's the way that it will stay.

Won-der
   If-this
Feel-ing will-pass

How-long
   Can-this
Cold-tor-ment-last

Watching her so close - but she's a million miles away.
But she doesn't know - that he really feels this way...
Watching her so close - but she's a million miles away.
But she doesn't know - and that's the way that it will stay.


But she doesn't know...



...and that's the way it will have to stay.
©2004-2010 ~xtheravenx
:iconxtheravenx:

Author's Comments

Ok...writing the description before writing the poem is retarded....

Anyway, I had Everlast's 'White Trash Beautiful' stuck in my head when I wrote this, so it's very Everlast-ish - :shrug: sorry about that.


Ya know, this has to be comparable to how Brahms felt for Clara, minus the feelings she felt back...

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:icontruly-devoted:
Never heard the song before so hey, I would never be able to tell. I like the form you used for this poem, very creative. Umm...my thoughtful comment part of my brain seems to be down at the moment...so, nice work, I like it. :)
:iconlittle-girl-lost:
:tears: that's beautiful ....... absolutely beautiful

you have taken my breath away matt!
:iconchameleon-dream:
Very Everlast-ish.. Having read that in the description, I have not been able to read this piece without it being in tune to that song... at the same tempo... with the same whiskey and smoke voice White Trash Beautiful is sung in.

I think I'll have to go back over it on a day that I haven't heard that song repeat itself 2 or 3 dozen times on the radio just to be able to appreciate it for the work it is, instead of the work that's overlayed it in my mind.

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when it all comes down it.. I'd rather be the static between channels


Good writers don't have trash cans, just recycle bins
:iconcriseyde:
the style works well with the theme of the poem, but please don't do that to me on a regular basis. i adore your style, and i hate feeling all... well... i guess how you intended the reader to feel with all those broken stop and go phrases... way too effective... i miss brad =(
:iconteea:
Watching her so close - but she's a million miles away.
But she doesn't know - that he really feels this way...
Watching her so close - but she's a million miles away.
But she doesn't know - and that's the way that it will stay.


brings me sad memories....


Loved to read Matt :) Thank you

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Abyssus Abyssum invocat.
:iconwalkingsoul:
I'm still trying to work out why I like your poetry so much... but hell if I did that then I'd know how to write good poetry myself... go on whisper me the secret ;)

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生きている いきている
:iconxtheravenx:
:giggle: It's ok - You don't always have to have something to say; I'd rather get one comment that's worth it versus fifty that aren't. :)

Thanks for the comment.

:ninjafella:Matt:ninjafella:

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The funniest thing I've read in a while:
chown -R us ./base
:iconxtheravenx:
Aww....*offers tissue* :hug:

Thank you, Jen. :)

:ninjafella:Matt:ninjafella:

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The funniest thing I've read in a while:
chown -R us ./base
:iconxtheravenx:
Ah - no worries; I just appreciate it being read. You left a comment, which says something in and of itself, doesn't it?
(thank you much for doing so, btw) :)

:ninjafella:Matt:ninjafella:

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The funniest thing I've read in a while:
chown -R us ./base

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